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Luna Whispers

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Oh cryptic, crescent moon you know the score,
silently shining on deserted shore,
starry, spangled sky weaves its magic spell,
hidden, hopeful daydreams woven so well.

Heavenly bodies illuminate sky,
flirting with earth's footstool catching one's eye,
delicate fingers of harps soft, sweet song,
resonant, lingering, tuneful yet strong.

Unleash your hold around me night's lament,
wild chiffon thoughts tarry with pure intent,
moonbeams rapsody lingers for awhile,
luna whispers bring Mona Lisa smile.

Winsome words flit across euphoric mind,
scale spiraled heights removing ties that bind.

 




 

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  • paperparadox silver member
    May 5, 2008

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    What a delight this sonnet is to read! There is some lovely poetic language and phrasing in your lines, giving this piece a soft, dream-like quality that perfectly suits the picture.

    Well done indeed, and best of luck in this contest.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 4, 2008

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    Delightful rhyme. I loved the magical tune played within your words. ~Pamela


  • RuthKephart
    April 28, 2008

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    I love the softness about this piece, it is almost as it holds it own glow around it. Good use of rhyme, nice rhyme scheme and I like the subtle illiteration thrown in to the mix. The only thing that caught my eye that if it were my own poem I might try to change is the use of score and underscores together as end rhymes in the first stanza. I also found the word underscores to throw off the meter a bit in that forth line. Infact by ending each line in the first stanza with a 'ore' word the reader gets their mindset on a aaaa rhyme pattern and is initially thrown off at the third line on the second stanza ( is this making any sense to anyone but me? ). Anyway, beautiful as it stands but if you do chose to make changes I'll catch them on the final read before judging. Thank you for your entry and best wishes in the contest
    Ruth


  • NeonRose
    April 28, 2008
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    A beautifully penned sonnet. The end lines are my favorite part.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    April 28, 2008

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    I am thrilled that I get to be the first to comment on this. Your poetry is always so simple and beautiful from beginning to end and a pure pleasure to savor. There is always a gentle flow to your well chosen words and each line is filled with exquisite imagery. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you in all of your endeavors Katie. Keep that pen handy and ever ready for use dear poet.
    ♥ Touchof1der

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