It stirs deep within
clouding judgment
and tipping me over the edge
of something unknown
juggling
with both hands tied behind my back
conclusion;
build two dreams upon one heart
my space ~
complete with everything I desire
part of me
and part of someone once touched...
Author notes
Picture is from Photobucket-
A contest entry
- ~* Another Picture to Pierce Your Mind *~ by Desire.
700 points, ended April 30, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - - Go for the Gold - (Pre-Writes...That's Right) by Desire.
700 points, ended May 1, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Tis a most wondeful penning indeed
The imagery and wording is brilliant
So very deep and expressive BRAVO!!!
Best of wishes to you
Tony
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Thank You!!
Wonderful Your piece qualifies and elated to see You back
Best wishes in my contest Sweet Soul!!
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Best of both worlds
This piece tugged at Spirit and touched the Heart
deep for while I was reading this which I did
several times...
I am seeing this canvas with a gorgeous painting,
looks like hues of violets with emerald shades~
nature based...oil painting
feels like...a place to take You away...
like in a Dream...
Seeing what looks like ducks...family of them...
Hearing word: pigeon...
now I am being shown a scene from Mary Poppins
when the lady on the steps is feeing the pigeons...
It feels like a message about Generosity in some
capacity
I'm being shown a park...lady in the park..
but hearing word: vagabond
and *don't judge a book by its cover* phrase
These lines grabbed and pulled~
complete with everything I desire
part of me
and part of someone once touched...
Excellent take on the prompt~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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i love the way you have blended it here, it adds something more to the picture to give it a life and a talk and yet reality as well. well done mummy
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Ahh I love the thought of the blending of two different worlds together because I think we often do that in life....
Crafted beautifully as always!
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a wonderful sharing of spirit about the ambiguous feelings of fear/attraction facing the abyss of the unknown ... amazing metaphor of tied hands juggling ...
suggesting "don't move - surrender" ...
a brilliant verse of intimacy with the great mystery,
maa
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Very nice. Thanks for sharing
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This is absolutely beautiful. Although there is sadness riddled in this writ, the greater joy overwhelms. I feel as if this is a piece that many of us can relate to. We meet and become a part of what we assume to be a desire, but later, assessing what we have, and contrasting it with what our hearts yearn for, causes war within. Unable to foresee our future, we grab at the present. A heart and soul only knows what it wants. Reasoning often takes back seat. I have really enjoyed this read and thank you for sharing. Best wishes in the comp love.
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