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No one...






  In severity to unblock
  selfless surprises
the grasping wind surrogates
  on supple flesh
~pretentious~
  but softly dissapointed
crippled in defeats victory
      laid in last breath.

  Heart startled
  for he dies..and no one cared.






 

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  • Desire gold member
    April 28, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: No one
    This piece tugged at the Heartstrings and for some reason when I read through this several times...I kept hearing word: Accident...
    like a teen in an accident...succombed to injuries
    For some reason...seeing a head on collison...
    Getting a reference to just got license
    This is just what I was seeing while reading...
    also
    While reading~ nudged to mention...
    focus on studies...You have a true Gift...
    use it
    for some reason...being shown: cosmetology...
    Getting this: You can make anyone look Beautiful

    These lines grabbed and pulled~
    Heart startled
    for he dies..and no one cared.
    Excellent take on the prompt~

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~