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Bar None

Beside me sits

a red tide whorl

   pooled in a vessel unstopped.

Effervescence rises through

my skin tight jeans, like

a memory of lust and thrust

forever in motion

with our moment's rhythm.

Desire and acquisition,

above all desire

floats on cigarette smoke

O's to disintergrate

in a fractured mirror's

pointed shards,

 

reflecting

 

 green squeezed

 lime wedges drowned

in  maroon toxins

 on a marble faced stoic

 table, beneath

 your deranged joking

 teeth snapping together sharp

 inane parodies of

conversation supported

by wrought iron preferred

  amnesia of intimacy. Spilled,

wasted on a floor

hard and familiar.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Epiphany of a fractured relationship as seen through a symbolic fractured mirror.

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  • lalainya rising
    May 5, 2008

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    Good Lord.

    Can I say more?

    Not likely.

    familar are your words in my mind, familar to my heart.

    Harsh, bitter yet a gentle undertone of broken lives under pressure of lifetimes of loving yet only receiving unlove in return.

    Your words hit in me the rush of all emotion yet keeping steady face and not showing...


  • gaze
    May 1, 2008
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    All mirrors seem to reflect fractured reflections when relationships are broken. Your poem has that hard feel, maybe hard isn't the right word though.
    You do have strong images, different than most I see to describe that kind of feeling.
    I specially liked amnesia of intimacy.
    Well done with thoughts and use of words.

    Mari


  • just mercedes gold member
    April 30, 2008

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    This is a lacerating read. I love /desire floats on cigarette smoke O's/ and /marble faced stoic table/ and the final two lines hit me so hard, I'm still reeling.

    You evoke pictures here seemingly effortlessly, with all the agony and loss involved. Shards is well used. Also amnesia of intimacy. Very well done.


  • doesne1care
    April 28, 2008
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    ooo interisting thnx for ebtering, n good luck! x