Destruction takes its hold
Forgetting what's right and what's wrong
We all stand
Swaying to the murderous melody
Staring blankly at the fading stars
This is the end...
A contest entry
- Apocalypse by Tehuni.
436 points, ended September 28, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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Excellent~
Powerful piece in Brevity and also message that grabs hard
Love how You penned this~
Bravo!!
Words: fading stars ... tug at the Heartstrings
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Tremendous one hell of a shott poem
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I love short poems, being concise is so difficult with large topics. Your last two lines in the first stanza make me think of a bunch of prairie dogs standing around. I can really picture all the people just standing outside there houses watching the world collapse
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very expresive.. and inspirational
... nicely penned!
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Thank you for entering my short poem contest. This is very well written and very descriptive. you have said much with just a few words.
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wow, this is really good! this is true in some ways, there is destruction, and ppl forget whats right and wrong... its sounds really awesome! ^^
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