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kadri

there were times
i loved you,

nymph among lilies, on
nights that stretched to no end
beneath shrouds of stars.

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i'll revise this later, when i'm not confined to twenty words.

A contest entry

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  • Puking Faerie Dust gold member
    May 20, 2008

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    Oooh, this was really pretty. I love how you use lilies pften in your work- they're so beautiful and creates this soft, elegant feel to everything. And you used the word nymph, which is totally amazing! I love that word, and I rarely see it used anywhere. Another astounding write, m'dear
    Jeanette*~


  • Ephiphany silver member
    April 28, 2008
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    Lovely entry you have here...

    thanks for entering my contest and best of luck to you.
    e

  • Aerden gold member
    April 28, 2008
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    For all that, I like what you've written. It's short, simple, and beautiful.

  • George Bowling
    April 28, 2008
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    Considering the restrictions, it's a good effort. I'll keep an eye out for review.