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kadri

there were times
i loved you,

nymph among lilies, on
nights that stretched to no end
beneath shrouds of stars.

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i'll revise this later, when i'm not confined to twenty words.

A contest entry

i love criticism.

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  • Ephiphany gold member
    April 28
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    Lovely entry you have here...

    thanks for entering my contest and best of luck to you.
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  • Aerden gold member
    April 28
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    For all that, I like what you've written. It's short, simple, and beautiful.

  • Suetonius
    April 28
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    Considering the restrictions, it's a good effort. I'll keep an eye out for review.