So many lonely people all with tears running down their face
From painful memories that the years can never erase
Each a different story, each with its own name
and yet some how they all vaguely seem the same
Look them in the eyes as the tears release their pain
Forming more sad drops, than a day of endless rain
Sad little children, mourning family
I lose myself as the tears surround me
The loss of lives, hurt, and a broken heart
I can see that they are falling apart
They need us to be there
even when they act like they don't care
A kind word can bring them a reassured smile
a broken heart can be fixed by a hug every once in a while
See the sadness in their eyes
they look to you and don't realize
Author notes
came to me like a song, just sad people in general
A contest entry
- What's The Story Behind The Tears :: Picture Prompt by Xox ILY xoX.
525 points, ended April 30, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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deep emotion draw to the forefront of the readers thoughts. you can't help but feel it. great write and congrats on the gold!
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You deserved the gold.
You deserve the gold for this piece, what maturity for a person so young. I am kind of like an old foggey at age 59 but you are so right in this. -
Hello Craven Rosewood. I read your poems, and this is my favourite. It has some tender moments in it. Good stuff.
Regards.
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Truly a lovely write. Great take on the prompt photo. Congratulations on your Gold trophy.
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That was amazing ... it actually put together the basic idea of crying, sadness, tears, and all. Very well written, it actually reads like a song, too. The rhythm is really great as well. I really can't find anything that even I would change. It's perfect as is in my eyes, and I think you have a lot of talent. The part that I found to be so true, but nobody realizes it is the 2nd set of lines. Although a different story to each one shedding tears, they seem so alike. People don't see that most of the time, at least I don't think they do. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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