Knees scraped raw
from all the hours
spent praying for your love
Heart bleeding
soul damned…
no answer from above.
God
does not exist.
Or else I must believe
I am not worth saving,
no grace
will I receive.
But the truth is harder.
For your love
I’ve sinned
I offered up
my soul to darkness;
just to touch your piquant skin
Who am I to pray to god,
I…
who begged the devil’s aid
I …
who shunned all righteousness
and in lusts fires played
But Satan is a trickster
and all I’d gained
was lost
Cursed by a heart that longed so
For one
not worth the cost
Patricia Gibson-Little
Author notes
I'm not sure if this is what you're looking for; but it's from my soul.
Patti
Written December 12th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- deep inner thoughts by thirdpersonman.
300 points, ended December 16, 2003, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Beautiful piece from your soul and bravo to you for even releasing~
It takes strength to do so~
I commend you for doing that
Keep on writing and releasing~
Look forward to more~
and much love~Desire
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Thy darkness serrated within thy soul
wherein those crimsone tears drip one by one
through all those secrets revealed!
I did enjoy you dark walk!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill
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What an amazing write!!!!! This was more than just a mere contest poem! I felt this deeply! Am a I rght in saying there is some truth to this poem? Again, it's a wonderful piece!!!!! ~Laura
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All I can say is, beautiful
simple diction, yet you managed to convey your complex thoughts in a very effective way. I do think this is the best piece in the contest up to now..good luck and well done! xxx
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wow, this is a great write and it tells the story but with a wild and unique but yet poetic twist. I can feel the emotion and almost see the character kneeling on the ground and almost begging for a heart to hold!!!! great write and thanx for the comment, I will do as you ask and rewrite my poem but i think that i will just overhall it and make it freeverse .... thanx again and good luck in the contest!!!!!
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