a hole in my umbrella
sun peeking through
oops! rain
dee garner
Šapril 27, 2008
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A contest entry
- Okay, Haiku! by chasingtheday.
600 points, ended April 27, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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In everyones life a little rain must fall. Just when the sun is shinning on you. hehe
Very good.
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Congrats on the HM. I love rain, so found this one quite appealing.
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Nicely done
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Great imagery here in these few lines. Actually quite beautiful with the sun peeking through, and then the rain. You have done well with this one. Well done. Congratulations on your trophy too.
All the best
Wayne Leon
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wow mama! you've already won the trophy?
So quick! Your poem was so cute that the contest holder couldn't wait any longer.
Love you
Shahrzad
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Your wonderful haiku brought a smile--especially thought the last line worked well for the ahaaa moment! Congratulations on the trophy!
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This is so cute. Nice poem.
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Love this simple but effective haiku. Makes me smile.
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Nice
Very clever with your thoughts, and so well worded.
Thanks for sharing, and congrates on the HM.
-Timothy
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Oops, rain right in the eye! Oh my, this brings back some fun memories of three mile walks to work in the rain...umbrellas don't do much good when it's windy and the rain comes at you in a sideways direction.
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a good piece of poetry you have penned - ah i love the rain, i have no choice really because it rains here every day
thank you for entering and good luck
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