I blink
just a moment too long
and I miss something
now it’s all gone wrong
I blink
when it hurts me
when the words you say
don’t make me feel free
I blink
at the wind and the dust
It blinds all of my sight
and the world seems unjust
I blink
so long and hard for you
you say the loving words
that touch my heart so true
I blink
as tears turn to cries
slowly rolling down my cheeks
and how they burn my eyes
A contest entry
- Blink by Tigris.
450 points, ended June 8, 2008, 17 entries
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got caught in feeling can have others flutter
you seem to be practicing your thoughts from an irritation in what's seen as from physical jerking at a particle to any offunderstanding, especially stanza two
you then get very pretty with that structured insight, heightening my own senses today doing the breathing in dust in many ways today
an element of the material dealt with well finally wells up at "as tears turn to cries" and there's more slow manifestation and endurance as with historical lachryma once more
basic clean for cling,
carolyn -
This was moving. I enjoyed reading this. Alright you are going too round 2. Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering.
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I really liked the flow of this poem, it was simple but deep enough to relate. Thank you for your entry
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a good poem here on the topic/prompt, i fear mine might be not seen with the connection but i hope it is seen
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Ah...now you have open the heart ..and if you do that..what else can come from it..except the tears..very heartfelt write..well stated verse...
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