The sun has a voice
of rich lavender and gold
as it peers from behind
black mountains and rocks
settling for the night
from a long day's work
it shrieks water colors
all over the sky
as if to shout to the world
Goodnight!
Author notes
I first entered this contest...and all of a sudden i had writers block...so i was searching pics on my computer and i came across this one. My first thought on this pic was that the sun looked like it was shouting! and it was so vibrant with colors...so i had to use it for this contest! hope you like
credit pic**unknown-came with my dell computer
A contest entry
- What is it feeling? by liduen.
600 points, ended May 18, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poet's Choice by Luna Tique Fringe.
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Comments
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good use of image, but I found a lack in the flow
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Wow, that is just too bad...First of all, I think my poem does have good flow. it rhymes, its about color, and I worked hard on this poem for this particular contest. I've waited weeks for you to even view it. and when i got your comment, i was kind of shocked. so I came here and started reading what you wrote to everyone. You didn't like anyones poem! Now the comment you just sent to all of us does make me a little angry, because here is your rules: "...it could be anything
relating to colors
personal experience
what it makes you think about
how it came about
what does it mean
anything"
If this is the case, I will not be participating in anymore of your contests...sorry
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Good use of the photo to reflect the poem..or vice versa..excellent use of the poem to reflect the photo!
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Wow! I have this pic...it also came on my dell computer and I had it as my user pic for a while. This is an interesting, refreshing write. Good luck in my contes
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Beautiful piece. I love sunsets, too.
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thank you
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This is beautiful
Oh I do love the sunrise and sunsets everywhere they do give us the colors so vivid and bright .
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Holy crap!
The imagery in this poem is soooo beautiful! You truly painted a picture with your words!! Makes me feel all warm and go to the beach to watch it set! Beautiful!!!!
Good luck in the contest!
Leslie
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[Beautiful]
[I think this is very beautiful. I love nature, and I think this describes the sun, sunset well, and I think no one could have done a etter job describing it] [ ] -
STUNNING WORK. I GOT LOST IN THIS. VERY WELL DONE INDEED. BEAUTIFUL WRITING AND IMAGERY HERE.
ALL THE BEST
WAYNE LEON
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