The flowers in her hair were white roses,
the groom was in his white tux,
with the white moon shining bright,
the music was turn down low,
the white doves were set a flight.
it was time for them to bid there goodnight.
A contest entry
- The colors of our world by PonyPride.
900 points, ended May 15, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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hmm... I beleive that this was saying love is encaptured in white but I did not like the grammer.. it seemed you did'nt work to hard
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You can almost picture everything you wrote in this poem. I really enjoyed reading this one. Great job
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It's a good idea, although the poem's too short to have that much of an effect (might've been otherwise had you used poetic devices, but heh). 'Tis decent for two lines.
Also, some grammatical issues:
flower's -- since you mean to make the noun 'flower' plural, you don't need an apostrophe; apostrophes signify possession. Thus, 'flowers.'
here -- her
withe -- white
-Cristina
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