Never was or will be ~
my anybody memory of an anyone
within simple recollection, no not I;
forcefed fear by the fistful
feeding phobias in every recall,
thinking back to when perceptions
of my individuality mattered enough
to forget me entirely,
run roughshod right
over that simple retrieval
then discard the remnants;
the clock's little hand falls
straight down again,
a wagging tail timing
my dogged existence;
one crooked finger waits
patiently to tickle the tonsils
tempting
teasing
eager for an ordinary purging,
to vomit up the last traces
of a sickeningly forgettable identity;
I am a nonentitiy
it's effortless to commemorate me
so retrieve the blank memory.
Author notes
Prompt: Quote
"I'm nobody. It's the easiest thing to remember. So remember it."
-El Wray [Planet Terror]
A contest entry
- Quote Inspired. [10 Entries] by Naridill.
525 points, ended May 3, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Seems something different from you - from what I have experienced. The motions create sickness in emotions - the words rumour the phrasing and fill to echo into such beautiful response to prompt - yet torn with pain.
Thanks for entering,
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Yes, pain and a sickness of emotions, indeed. It was personal drama, that was happening at the time I wrote it, which infused that aspect more than usual.
Thanx and peace.
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Pain works for you.
Although - I hope all is well.
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a very brilliant piece! Keep on writing
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Wonderful
Very well with such gripping images. Formed so skillfully and well crafted. Best of luck in the contest.
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Quite the provoking piece of thought you have penned here. You relate wonderfully to the prompt; and measure a depth within words, to encompass the emotion and lack there of - throughout.
"the clock's little hand falls
straight down again,
a wagging tail timing
my dogged existence"
Loved these lines... Powerful, indeed. Empathy woven from nothingness, and into light. Great write my dear!! Best wishes in the contest!!
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Brilliant write! Wonderful wordplay and clever application of the prompt, and I thought this had just the right amount of alliteration to add impact without distracting. Best of luck in the contest!
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this is amazingly well done and left me in awe. i wish you well in this contest which you have entered and am looking forward to reading more from you in the very near future. viyanna rosemarie
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Wow, this was powerful. Your spin on this quote was a dark realization, a look into the inadequacy of human-life, the way it fades into the background, how individuality becomes extinct. Saddening, but real and true. Excellent job,
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a good piece of poetry and you mentioned my name even lol i like the dark imagery here which you have used.
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cool. this is my favorite for the whole day
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