They were simple bands,
applied with well-meaning words
by well-meaning people,
not knowing they would twist
and double back again,
twist
and double back again,
cutting off
my blood.
But now I know.
Now I recognize
the difference between restriction and restraint.
And I will write a lifetime of honesty
circulating myself
until I am free.
Author notes
Prompt: I will not acknowledge any poetry that isn't freedom. Manuel Bandeira
http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/show/117786-Manuel-Bandeira-Poetica--English-
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I looooove that concept. Those things gone back on folding into a tourniqet of which you! are subject to.
I also like that this poem is on realization,
"Now I recognize
the difference between restriction and restraint."
^_^
This was great.
"And I will write a lifetime of honesty
circulating myself"
I imagined flowing illuminated scripts and texts encircling you, it was a good lasting image ^^
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'And I will write a lifetime of honesty
circulating myself until I am free'
Excellent lines! Actually the whole poem is great. I liked the thoughts you show here, and that is also the way I think poetry should be written and treated.
Very well done!
Mari
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Can ya put a tourniquet on my muse
, I need some peace and quiet lol....nice metaphor in this, to stem the flow, the bleeding yet a poet always writes what is in his heart so if the heart is dead then the words would have no meaning at all. Love, C
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I am now officially morally opposed to tourniquets! So, i that way I'm afraid I will have to deny your humble request.
On the other hand, I do believe I have some duct tape around here somewhere. . .
Thanks for commenting, lady!
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Excellent metaphor! Love the first three stanzas! Even medical folk need training to know how to apply so as to halt hemorrhage without causing non-essential additional damage. Well-meaning does not preclude unintended harm. Excellent descriptions. Nice juxtaposition of "restriction and restraint." Very nice contemplation of motivation in writing, and hoped for outcomes.
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wonderful interpretation here this seems to capture my feeling in reading Bandeira the use of simple clear words to bring such profound feelings and ideas; such a remarkable poem here...so very well done...PK
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excellent TEN an uncommon twist here with restriction and restraint a lifetime of honesty circulating-very poetic and well conveyed...peace
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