You seem so lost and confused,
Do you know which ways up?
Your looking so bemused.
Grab my hand i'll guide you through.
Every second your breathing harder,
Every hour your getting colder,
Every day i seem to be losing you.
Wake up, wake up, wake up,
I hear you screaming, waiting for you to
Wake up, wake up, wake up,
I see you running, still waiting for you to
Wake up, wake up, Wake up,
let me know this nightmares through.
It's ok i'm with you now,
I will lead you the way,
Stay with me, do not stray,
Just hold on tight i'll get you through.
Every second your breathing harder,
Every hour your getting colder,
Every day i seem to be losing you,
Wake up, wake up, wake up,
I hear you screaming, waiting for you to
Wake up, wake up, wake up,
I see you running, still waiting for you to
Wake up, wake up, Wake up,
let me know this nightmares through.
Just hold on tight i'll get you through...
Wake up, wake up, wake up,
I hear you screaming, waiting for you to
Wake up, wake up, wake up,
I see you running, still waiting for you to
Wake up, wake up, Wake up,
let me know this nightmares through.
plz tell me wat u think and wat u think the poem/song is about thxs =)
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oh and i think it's about you trying to help someone who's been through something bad. A friend? Although some parts hint that it's more than friendship.
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Oh my god, why haven't i seen this before?
Im actually speechless. I loved this! Best poem i've read this month i think.
That is amazing. No kidding..
have some "clappies"
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good write, once again.
i think your poem is mostly about maybe a lost love, or a love that's being held back by some outside force.
if not about love, i suppose it could be something about a loved one in a hospital.
but, overall, it seems that it's pretty much about a love being forced away in some fashion.
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I hear you screaming, waiting for you to
Wake up, wake up, wake up,
i like those lines. im gonna write a response 2 this, mk?
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if u want to lol
thxs for the comment too
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its an awesome poem and could make a good song.
i think its about u trying to help someone out of a bad situation but at the same time ur waiting for them to help u as well. -
Hmm.. honestly I thought that this was about you trying to get someone to see what they have sitting right in front of them. Maybe see them in a different light. I don't know.. maybe I'm wrong. Just what I got from it.
Your way better at writing then I am.
That's for sure.
Keep it up.
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I REALLY THINK IS SWEET AND REALLY WELL WRITTING!!!! KEEP WRITTING PLZ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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i think this is a fantastic peice. during points in the poem/song i thought it was to do with some one dying and your trying to wake them up but in other parts im not so sure
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Wow
I really like this. It would make one fantastic song. Its very romantic in a sad and depressing way...
Brilliant though, needless to say
<3 ~(Chanted)~
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Wow this would make one AMAZING song
D you are one amazing writer :]
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"Every second your breathing harder,
Every hour your getting colder,
Every day i seem to be losing you,"
shouldn't the your be you're ?
i really like this song -
Would make an awesome song. Let me know when its out.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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sounds great i like it good job
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i think i already commented on this 1.bit i like it!
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wow
i can see someone life a best friend that is getting into alot of drugsand leving you behinde they r steeling and hanging with the wrong type of people it seems so real its almost scary you did a realy good job and i hope youll message me i've never read anything this good
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ty for ur comment ^.^
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I really like it.You can like feel emotions as you read it.
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ty for the comment
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i can actually hear this.. does that sound odd? it is very good "Your looking so bemused.Grab my hand i'll guide you through." ITS VERY DEEP if it makes it to the raido i wont be suprised... it is very good ^.^
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ty ^.^
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good
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yea np u should try making it a song if possible.(x
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wow gr8 poem/lyrics I can totally see that being a song i think its one of the best ones i have read for a long time it has alot of fealling and its very meaningful to me.
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thxs for ur comment ^.^
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Watching Corpse Bride while reading this produced some interesting melodies to go with the lyrics, but probably not what you had in mind for it. Personally I would have liked another verse in there but other than that it's incredibly well written, I think it would make a great song. What kind of style were you looking at for it?
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not really thought of a style for it yet.
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Personally I think it would work well in one of two ways. Either go Breaking Benjamin-esque or Prom Queen.
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nice. you are wicked talented, meh friend =]
Rayne
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thxs ^.^
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Wow, words cant describe the feeling I get from this song. Its beautiful! I wish someone would help me through my nightmare.
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thxs for reading
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very pretty song
the song is someone singing about how they want to help someone else who has really bad nightmares? -
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could be lol. thxs for ur comment
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ur welcome
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good
wow dude this is one of the best poems i have ever read.
nice write
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wow :] i love it i seems liek its about you losing some one but then they keep coming back im not sure but i like it alot
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thxs for ur comment
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omg
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its very amazing man love it
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ty glad u like it
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i think its amazing
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Oh wow this is a really good set of lyrics. Like i think i can hear it as a song in my head when ir ead it. I write songs myself . I have 27 myself but personally ilike my new ones the best. Great Job. Though it'd tottally make a hit on the charts.
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lol thxs for ur comment
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Oh my gosh. i want to hear is as a a song.t he words are so uttely incredible. I really adore it. im not sure what to say.wow. and you live near me... . well ish.x but that was pretty amazing. wow.
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thank u for ur comment
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amazing
this was such a good poam omg i love they way its also a song .....
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ty
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I like it
I thought this was very nice.
about- well, I have several different view points on what this could be abut but I guess i can say one of them;one of my ideas is it's about a person who is seeing themself in their own nightmare...
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thxs for ur comment like ur idea on wat its about
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Your welcome
your welcome.
My poems aren't much compared to yours! ^^
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wow this is realy good....ur a great writer for a beginner....ive never wrote something like this....
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ty for ur comment ^.^
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awesome
Amazing, I love it, Love how you can tell exactlly what you mean, but you say it in your own way..i'm no good at poems, my stories are insane, but thats ok
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ty for ur comment
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my heart is racing my blood is boiling if just i could awake. my love is dying my wings are no longer flying. falling to my death with a knife threw my chest. just wake up my mind is screaming all i am able to do is lye here bleeding and just listening to my love screaming.
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This is an awesome poem... It sounds like you're trying to help someone.. you have some good stuff... I loved reading this piece...
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thxs
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I think it sounds like it's someone you know whos in denial or something? And you're trying to help them/need to help them.
I really like what you've written.
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ty for ur comment
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to me its as if ur referring to urself. 2 let whateva is hurting etc to wake up and grab hold of the situation. almost contradicting between urself and who u are maybe...
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awesome never looked at it like that. thxs for ur comment
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This is aweesomee!
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yes nice interpetation
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i think this is about a person who doesnt know where to go in life and you want to guide them through or some1 is in a como and u want them to wake the fuck up?
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oh my bejesus!
i think your poemish song lyrics are maagnificently amazing :]
i reckon it is about a person telling another to stay[[alive]] and just hold on to life. i believe that the person is saying that they will hold him/her up and help em out.
HOPE I HELP
YOU ARE WONDERFUL.
k;;enjoy
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ty for reading and for ur comment and interpretation ^.^
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awesomeness lol so you did this for your band thingy?
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yea kinda
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Heyy I love this
its sooooo good
<3 Uber sexy best girl
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thxs for the comment ^.^
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iloveitt its really good. =]]
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ty ^.^
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wow this is really good
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thxs ^.^
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wow
david this was really good. while i read it, it was you were there reading/ singing it to me i loved every stanza. the piece waz awesome. your such a good writer keep up the good work. ttyl
l am thinking about what it means. but nice piece twin. you would be sweet in a band.
sincerely your twin and best friend,
Chandra .C.
more hugs
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thxs very much twin ^.^
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wow..like this is so amazing!! i love it! i wish i could hear you play it =)
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thxs =)
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Great Write
I think you really should try to find a band to write for you could make good money. Try to work on your shyness and become a singer a.k.a front man.
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thxs i really do want to try and get in a band =) thxs again
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u truely know how to write both songs and poems twin. Thanx to me u figured out u wrote something wrong LOL! but i still love ya bro peace it
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WOW, WOW, WOW!!!!
this is unbelievably magnificent!!! i really really really like this! u ARE talented, very talented! i can't describe in words how great this is!! its PERFECT! lol, great write. and now we will have to write a song or poem together! ^.^
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ty and sounds gd
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awwies, bravo uncle david
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