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Bistro Expectations (Ziti)

Creamy attributes nestle warm expectations.
Cocooned anticipation served al dente, spiced.
As Sagiovese accents caress thirsty souls
promising reality, fulfillment over pretense.

How often we await cheesy entanglements
sating desires captive in society’s whatnots.
Illusions of delicacy feathering dairy stench
as though it would tame eternity’s wounds.

I’ve tasted supremacy too often, without fear,
briefly losing euphoria to quiet bodily roars.
Though exquisite, the numbness of perfection
still lacks the demand to sever divinity’s ties.

As I float above perceptions of earthly bonds,
hindsight becomes the beacon of famed youth.
Its sauce lingering against black lace vanity
inebriating the tainted paragon of you.

Stained tablecloths could never inspire me,
the way the wind does against bare flesh.
But you, I envision as tasty morsels of life
raging war against the solitude I have left.






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Prompt: 4 letter word - I chose Ziti

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  • penman gold member
    July 7
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    Excellent

    Oh my what a powerful read. Simply amazing. Thank you for sharing.

  • Prophetic...


    Outstanding Depth!


  • kitty23
    April 27

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    wow awesome

    i love it it was amazing

    nice work here

    i like the choices in words

    thank you so very much for sharing this awesome poem with me

    keep up the grreat work


    KITTY

    P.S

    this is my fav
    ill come read more soon

    promise

  • Funluvingrl16
    April 27
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    i love ziti

  • ml12
    April 27

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    "hindsight becomes the beacon of famed youth." I love this line, it is so eloquent. I really enjoyed the exploitation of my taste buds and your use of visual imagery. Thank you, I'm going to get coffee

    . Rewarded 4

  • Good luck in the contest. This write has lots of vivid imaginality. thanks for sharing this and I wish you lots of luck. Cool mental picture this seems to make also.
  • Delicious!

    I realise this is a metaphor but .. god, I'm hungry now .. "cheesy entanglements" makes me think of strings of melted cheese from a big plate of nachos breaking off and wrapping around your fingers .. mm.
    Given the references, I guess it's not suprising .. but in line 14, what I read is : "bacon of famed youth" .. That gives that line a WHOLE new meaning .. as well as the song "Smells Like Teen Spirit" (teen spirit smells like bacon! yum!)
    Ok, now to get serious - this is a really interesting approach that I would NEVER have thought to take, given the prompt that you were given. The imagery is creative and fresh, and makes this a true pleasure to read, with all it's insights and bizarre-but-intriguing metaphors!

    . Rewarded 8


  • ferg silver member
    April 27

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    Vivid

    This has a lot of vivid imagery and great metaphors that take the reader through the meandering thoughts of the poet. You touch on many things here. Good job!

    . Rewarded 4

  • ian sawicki silver member
    April 27

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    i had to look up what the title meant when i left a comment in another entry into this contest i did not look at the contest, i assumed it was about swearing but it is not. well i just had someting nice before to eat so i won't let the cheese taunt me i like the illusions of delicacy... dairy stench makes methink of how all the farmers, here anyway, are being given the finger by the governments, though prices have just gone up here on such things. i like the psoitive ending, there is something nice. a good poem.

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