Girl on a hill in a peasant dress
Shading her eyes from the sun's caress
Wind runs his fingers through raven hair
Leaves swirl to earth in the Autumn air
Falling in torrents of gold's and reds
Leaving a carpet on which she treads
Down to the valley where I will be
Breathless until she is there with me
'Neath the old Oak at the river's bend
All of my waiting will come to end
Yonder she runs and her laughter rings
Into my arms and my spirit sings
Intimate dances to Nature's tune
Day will succumb to the stars and moon
And we'll lie together 'neath darkened skies
Content with the light from each others eyes...
Long, long ago yet I see them still
The Oak in the valley, the girl on a hill
Clearly remembered though time has passed
Blurring the reasons they couldn't last
Chances, like Autumn, can slip away
Sometimes forever is but one day
And always a moment just passing through
By a tree at the river in love with you
Rakerman
A contest entry
- Friends of Yesterday by RogueShadow.
1200 points, ended December 17, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-Written Rhyme Anyone? No Trophies by piccola.
900 points, ended January 28, 30 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - RHYME AND RHYTHM-PW allowed by Heva Feva.
550 points, ended July 3, 107 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"Chances, like Autumn, can slip away
Sometimes forever is but one day
And always a moment just passing through
By a tree at the river in love with you"
These are my favourite lines!
Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
-heva ♫
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wow, i can see why i was beaten!! excellent rhyme and excellent flow and most of all great imagery. I even think this poem has gotten my muse up. once again wow.
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I see I've already commented on this piece and I haven't changed my mind. I see also that it is a pre-write and find myself wishing that .... well we both know what I wish. Please don't let me die without reading something new from you.
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wow, amazing yet again. i loved it, so beautiful you make me feel like i am watching the scene unfold before my very eyes. Your rhyming is impeccable. A really well written piece. Just stunning.
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"Content with the light from each others eyes..."
This is so visual; I can picture the two sitting there
not speaking, just gazing into each others eyes and yet content. Beautiful writing.
I'm spending the day with your writes ... it's beautiful here and somehow it seems fitting to immerse myself in writing that is beautiful. *rose* *hug**starwars* (had to put in fighting too) ;)
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"Chances, like Autumn, can slip away
Sometimes forever is but one day
And always a moment just passing through
By a tree at the river in love with you"
Where you been? I dont think I need to say anything about your poems anymore.
♥
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Reminds me so much of the 'Red River Valley' song...and a parting that I remember in my long ago days...
I guess we all have something in our past that is like that of anothers past...
thanks for the read...
that you wrote so wonderfully.
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This is really something and i like the way you show time passing by having a wide gap between stanza, you are a master, that's all I can say.
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You leave me speechless every time. And that just makes you brilliant. Some poets are good and make you want to analyse why they are good. Some poets are great and the poem just speaks for itself. Gosh...I'd almost forgotten how good you really are...I love it, I really do and the picture is just perfect x well done as always! x
How have you been?
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