Moon's glow through the window,
he curls toward it, unfolds like a flower.
Shadows caress the perfect planes of him.
A landscape of smooth flesh,
a clean canvas stretched over hard muscle.
Curves outline the fine figure of a man.
Trace the dip of a shoulder.
Count the knots of the spine.
Flat back, round rump, soft lips.
Unclad, natures artwork is revealed.
Captured strength and beauty,
the male form.
Author notes
written for a contest!
Constructive criticism appreciated!
Image © Dylan Ricci Photography Limited
In a list
A contest entry
- a flower... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended April 29, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments? Constructive criticisms? Is the rhyme working? Does the last stanza fit? The last line?
Comments
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very good work that exels in its pictorial quality. The illustration is quite good as well. best of luck
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oh wow!
congrats on the well deserved silver...this is excellent!!!!
and the picture is very entertaining as well...I might add...LOL!!!
beautifully penned indeed!
Blessings! Tammy
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This is very well realized. Beautiful imagery. The last stanza is the resolve, it fits perfectly.
This is really well done. Good luck on the contest.
Garrison
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This scenario is quite magical and brings the depth on the issued raised here in the wonderful poetry...well done...
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