Coiled in the recesses
of her unawakened spirit,
her latent femininity deferred,
she lingers, loveless.
Somehow, someday,
passion's pliant fingers
will seek and find her
and she will be transformed
from dull protean clay
into a dancing dragonfly;
love's alchemy turning
base metal into gold--
the pure radiance of womanhood.
A contest entry
- DRAGONFLY~~~TRANSFORMING FRAGILE INTO FIRE by Ithica & Blue Rew by Blue Rew.
3000 points, ended May 5, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Excellent. I loved this direct approach to the prompt which simply illuminates the courageous stance of a woman. A brilliant entry.
I loved it. ~Pamela 
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This is a testament to the power of touch to heal and transform... A tiny jewel that was shining from many facets by the end... Nice job!
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This one shines...taking on the prompt in a
direct manner that is also very poetic.
The title works well as does the ending line.
Blue
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I think happiness is the kiss of love: everything vibrates to a higher level and radiance smiles. I love it when a man radiates, too. I used to know one who bounded around his house singing broadway show tunes when he was happy. I don't think he ever walked anywhere. It was a contagious feeling, that vibrance of life.
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AH!
now see what a subtle touch can do ...? Amazingly beautiful.
This I love, truly. I loved how loveless became transformed by touch, and how clay turned to gold, in your poem. So special.
Blessed be.
Myra
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a good poem though in my personal opinion, it could have done with a little bit more detail rather than under-doing it
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Write on, brother. One.
Dez
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People are transformed by love and passion, you can pick them out in the crowds, there is a radiance. I think that is a wonderful response to the prompt and done with excellent choice of words.
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wonderful bill this is gold for me or at least a trophy it walks all over the promt and the metphore is so consistent all the way through this piece one of the best i have read from you bill good show
John
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Nice to think you have such an idealised vision of us, Bill.
Seriously, this is a good interpretation of the Fleming drawing, and a well-turned poem.
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