Lightning flashes jagged forks across a leaden sky,
Thunder rumbles, rattling the nearest windowpane.
And through that window I see that which brightens up my eye,
My Teresa laughing outside, playing in the rain.
The wind is shrieking through the eaves, a strident sound that lingers,
I smile and shake my head at such a wondrous sight to see,
For peeking through her fingers at a whirlwind made of leaves,
My Teresa gleeful, giggling and all the world to me.
In the morning off we go (I will not tell her where)
Only that we are to have adventure rare and true,
Her face is rapt and radiant as she pulls me here and there,
My Teresa, all aglow, as we walk through the zoo.
We see a man with balloons in his hand, yellow green and blue,
And we loop the strings of one of each around Teresa's wrist.
She looks at me adoringly and tells me 'I love you',
My heart is soaring, singing, never have I felt such bliss.
When day is done and home we've come, we cuddle by the fireplace,
Recounting all the happy things that we have seen today,
I see the joy and the contentment written on Teresa's face,
I'm so thankful that someone who loves me so has come my way.
She jumps to her feet and runs so fleetly across the hardwood floor,
She peers outside into the darkness through the windowpane.
'What a grand day!' I heard her say 'I couldn't ask for more'
'But look! Come see!' she said to me 'I think it's going to rain!'
Lightning flashes jagged forks across a leaden sky...............
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Written December 15th, 2003
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WONDERFUL!
This is a WONDERFUL write! Excellent. The story line is so lovely, and the flow and rhyme are perfect. How blessed you are to hold such a great love in your heart. And you expressed it so beautifully within this poem. Blessings! Tammy -
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I meqn this is pure beauty, and has such elegance to the feeling and the description is so clear, that one can actually picture the whole adventure, from begining to start, as one is there with them.
From the description through the words used, one can hardly fail to see the love that is so strongly felt between mother and daughter, that love can also be said of lovers as well. And of course mother and daughter, there is love between them the mother daughter love.
I too love the rain so much, that when i was little i used to playin the rain, when ever it rainned it was always a joy to go outside, and just splash undre the water falling from the zinc roof, just under the open sky as it pours down so hard. I still do.
"I like what a grand day" it expresses all the joy happines and excitment she has felt through out the whole day. -
i love the way you express, i love the image this poem is giving me and i love to read it.
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Fantastic!
Oh, oh, OH! I love this poem. It made me smile all the way through it! You have so much talent. This poem is WONDERFUL! Fantastic write! I am glad you both love each other so much.
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Beautiful tender poetry ,such splendor to behold .Love has a way of bringing so many wonders to one's life .And your love for her flows so softly and so strong through the whole read...simply exquisite and most delightful warming words to view
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wow...you draw up a very vivid image with this...i especially enjoyed the first stanza and how you begin and end with the same line...a very euphoric experience
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Simply, this is a gorgeous thing to wake up to, and I am guessing she feels the same.....Wonderful imagery,such tenderness and insight into a side of Teresa that only the poet seems to know this fully.
Impressive.
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Good visuals...
Lightning. And fires. Both magical, Like your Theresa..... -
This was beautiful. Strong opening lines, "Lightning flashes jagged forks across a leaden sky," and the same line to end the poem made it stronger I think. This could be a poem about a father/daughter or mother/daughter or as it probably is a lover/lover. Unless I missed it the gender of the writer is unknown. If it were my poem I don't know if I would change It to make the gender known, to make it known that Theresa is a woman and not a child but keep the innocence? I don't know. I enjoyed it thoroughly, a lot of strong image and good choice of words. Very well written.
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I love the emotion in this poem-- I've felt it with my little son. They really are the most joyful little things, and I've never had more fun than with him. It makes me think of Psalm 127 " Sons are a heritage from the LORD ,
children a reward from him." and it's true. Being loved wholeheartedly by an innocent is such a joyful experience.
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I did like the child like wonderment of this peice so very much, because love comes in many forms to us whether its simple. This poem flows from the begining taking us each step of the way with you on this journey. Take care, Lissa
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You humble Me
Reality has a sensual nature to it, which many of us often forget.
Some times Age does not mean a thing because love brings out innocents.
Teresa is a lucky woman, blessed thats true,for I know God sent You to her,and her to You.
You write about her so warmly, but something even deeper, your love for her comes right though your work, and your wonderment of her.
As I read this I tell no lie ,I had tears rolling down my face..
Your Love is firm, so strong and magical.
Your love floats all around the room and every where you two go just like gossamer lace flutters in the wind.
You are her hero, her Lover , and a gift from God to her,You will never fail in her eyes.
You two people are so blessed and it shows in this Wonderous poem..
Edited on Dec 16 because ''.
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