I fell down from the sky that day
Off my cotton cloud.
Fell right down and hit the earth
Landing hard and loud.
Hard enough to keep me down,
Scared to stand back up.
Cuts and scrapes from head to toe,
My heart and soul erupts.
Tears were streaming down my face,
Spilling forth the pain.
Splintered heartstrings break inside,
Sky sure looks like rain.
Why do I fail to meet Your needs?
It happens once again.
Why should compliance be so hard?
Why cant I just give in?
Years of reasons built up inside,
Where all these issues dwell.
A place so deep and very dark,
It feels a lot like hell.
I lay myself down at Your feet
And begged for You to stay.
I pleaded with my voice and tears
And every other way.
So now I hide myself away,
With You still in my head.
I close my eyes to life and love,
And wish that I were dead.
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OMG I AM FLOORED! Dont take this the wrong way but I LOVE YOU! Your writing style is uniue and you always have that one line that completely blows me away! In this particular one this verse would be the one
"Tears were streaming down my face,
Spilling forth the pain.
Splintered heartstrings break inside,
Sky sure looks like rain."
Beautiful, your definetly a new fav of mine
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Option number please...
Rather depressing and borderline emo... Anyway, not horrible though...
Thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest.
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wishing you were dead...i kno that feeling well. good wirte
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and so life's struggles continue...it's amazing how feelings that are truly your own, can seem as though they've been lived by others. A sad but enjoyable read. Well done.
Rory
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a good piece, i sigh here with why do i fail to meet your needs, the only needs that matter are your own stay true to that
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a beautiful write,really from the heart[where all good writes come from]I think anyone who's been in love can relate to this,great stuff...remember,those that feel pain the most,have the biggest hearts.x
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Love is a hard reality when not reciprocated and probably the hardest thing to get over. I felt the hurt in this as well as pain and longing. Yet I also felt the knowledge that it would not change no matter how deep you loved.
Thank you for sharing a piece of your heart here.
Becky
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Thank You for the comments...sometimes in sharing we find healing...and i think i am beginning that journey now.
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This is what the truth of the life..and we all can relate with it..I love this sentimental piece..wonderful grasp of the heart..well done....
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Thank You so much...it was from deep down inside and about the truest thing i have ever written. Thank You for hearing me.
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