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You complete me

You make my heart melt,
I lose my breath around you,
You complete me,
I would be lost without you.

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  • aeolia
    April 28, 2008

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    I'm sure a lot of people can relate to this. It is a bit dry, though, and rather bland; this would've been more effective had you used poetic devices. Still, not bad for twenty words.
    -Cristina


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    April 27, 2008

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    Yes I... AGREE THIS IS THE LOVE WHICH COMPLETE US AND YES MELT US AS WELL..YOU ARE WITH THE MELODY OF THE LOVE ROAMING IN THIS VERSE..WELL DONE...