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nowhere to go

There’s this dream I’ve been having every night
Like a nightmare, it gives me quite the fright
I’m running away with nowhere to go
They always catch me, as far as I know

There’s something I’ve been hiding underneath
A secret held close, buried deep beneath
A side of me that I wouldn’t dare show
I’m running away with nowhere to go

I close my eyes and wish for tomorrow
I’m running away with nowhere to go
The demon’s inside are threatening to bite
But I won’t give up without a good fight

I’m running away with nowhere to go
These problems of mine, they always follow
So why is it then that I just don’t see
This thing I’m running from, well, it’s just me









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I have a re-occuring dream that I am running away from someone/being chased by someone.

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  • worshipchick
    September 12

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    I think everyone can relate to this one way or another. You did a great job capturing that fear/desparation. I like the repetition, it keeps the piece moving. Great write. :-)

  • neon nightmares gold member
    May 10

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    dont know if you did it on purpous but i really like the way you've repeted the line 'I’m running away with nowhere to go' in different lines of each stanza.
    I really like this piece. it reads through well .
    hugs


  • insearchofsweetness
    May 9
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    Nice twist at the end. . .and the start drew me in


    • background music
      May 9

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      Thanks! They say the people you dream about are a reflection of something in your own personality... so I think that might be what this dream means - running away from my problems. Glad you enjoyed the read.

  • bozoloper
    May 5

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    i like the repition of lines in different places in the stanzas. give the repetitive nature of the dream across, without boring the reader. good stuff!


  • Lucy. gold member
    April 29

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    yes, I think we can all relate to this! Well written, I like the repetitiveness of 'I'm running away with nowhere to go', I think it's effective.
    Hope you stop running soon


  • nilav
    April 27

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    very well written poem with good flow and rhyme...many of us have this dream or the nightmare at one time or another in life....


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 27

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    Ahhh I have had those dreams before... and I have also had that nightmare in real life too!

    This is very well written indeed and your flow and rhyme are excellent!!

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  • Heavens Child
    April 27

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    I like the flow of this poem. It's as if I can feel you running because of the repetition of that line. And the rhyme is also well done.
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