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"Summertimes Past"

Giggling kids slamming doors
after they've finished with their chores.

Bike races and games of Hide n Go seek,
or maybe go for a swim in the the creek.

A trip with Mom to the park
and getting to stay out after dark.

Sunday pinics at Mawmaws and cousins to see.
Baseball games and foot races and a skinned knee.

Papa took us kids to his garden for a treat.
We all helped bring back watermelons for all to eat.

Though summertime is always a blast.
The best ones are the ones in the past!

Author notes

Lots of memories in those summer times of the past.

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  • faithful-star
    June 8

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    Aww this made me want to become a little kid again! Your rhyming in this poem was done pretty well and flowed smoothly throughout the whole piece. The only thing that I would suggest is in the last line of the last stanza, maybe you should go with: "Though summertime is always a blast. The best ones are the ones in the past!" I would suggest this because right now, the last part sounds a bit awkward because of the "summertimes past". Best of luck and thanks for entering!

    ~Faithful-Star


    • craftyangel43
      June 8
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      Thank you so much for the advice...I made the changes and loved the way it read a lot better than before. Thanks again

  • crazymomma
    June 7

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    This sounds like a lovely summers day. It made me wish I was a kid again. Lovely imagery in this piece. The flow was a bit off in places but good poem

    • craftyangel43
      June 8
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      Thank you for your nice comments. Don't we all wish we could go back to those days sometime?

  • cricketjeff gold member
    May 12

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    Lovely poem, a fun gallop through summer, rhyme is perfect but for our style of poetry you need to look to match the syllable count and stress patterns in your lines. A very good effort and either judge will be happy to go through your poem with you.


    • craftyangel43
      May 12
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      Thank you Jeff for your nice comments and I would be glad to have someone go through my poem with me sometime.
      Thanks again.
      Cheryl

  • sunny day silver member
    April 27

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    What wonderful memories of those summertimes past you have shared with us in this lovely rhyming verse. It is so filled with light and love. You left me with such a big smile as the imagery you created is still flowing across my mind's eye. Thank you for such a beautiful read and best wishes for you in the contest. This has a golden ring to it. Love and God bless, Joyce


    • craftyangel43
      April 27

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      I am glad you liked this poem Joyce, those carefree days of our youth were so magical. Glad to have made you smile. Thank you and God bless,Cheryl

  • crazymomma
    April 27
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    Great poem

    I love this! I brings back memories of my childhood. The imagery was so amazing I felt as if I were really there.


    • craftyangel43
      April 27
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      Thanks crazymomma...Sometimes I wish I could step back in time to those days of carefree times.

  • The Poetic Angel gold member
    April 27

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    nice memories you have there crafty ... kids and summertime is always a good memory ... good luck in the contest x cheeky x


    • craftyangel43
      April 27
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      Thank you cheeky for the nice comment. yes kids and summertimes always seem to go together. thanks again
      Hugs,
      crafty
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