I gave you my fire,
And look what you did with it
Love is for the birds.
Author notes
From the book
Juno's Peacock
sun-rising-books.com/juno_s_peacock_1.html
Written December 15th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- The Most Extreme Haiku Challenge by lenskysix.
305 points, ended August 29, 2006, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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how did i miss this one
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Nicely done as it relates not only the prometheus story but others as well. Seen here all so often in the form of broken heart poems and lost love poetry. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest!
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well, i must admit my ignorance when it comes to mythology... so, i had to go to google to find prometheus' story... now i am laughing! this is very clever/witty indeed... ruined the earth, and use it in hatred, that's what we did/do with it! great write, thanks for your entry! oh, and thanks for making me learn something!
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Wonderful bronze trophy winner. Congratulations.
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this is one of those that you gota sit down and think about, a good haiku really isnt a good haiku without that. Also, the title is as part of the poem as the main body, because without it the body wouldn’t make much sence. (good thing I think) and the subject matter was my favorite, what compeled you to write about poor thoughtfull Prometheus? That was a real treat, I liked and wanted something like this! Expert example of a haiku my friend, oh and chilling too!! (I love that last line)
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hahaha.no ego?ouch?
but i liked this.even with the ego.esp with the ego.look what
they did with your fire indeed!a shame.tsktsktsk. -
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Now this would win a haiku death match for sure.....
Nice twist at the end...on so many levels.
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An entire scene was evoked from the title alone.
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Very creative! I love it!
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Hehe! You are a good poet, Jeremi, but you ain't no haijin
Unfortunately, very few good poets can make the mental shift necessary to write a really good haiku (it's the Zen thing, i.e. no ego
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~G
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very nice haiku, very interesting, thank you for entering and keep up the good work
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creative!!!
Very interesting and creative title. Unique and thought-provoking haiku. An enjoyable piece. Thanks for sharing
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hahaha...... a satire? it is...... or folly? It works for me... but I don't know if Basho would approve.
Thanks for the entry. Best of luck to ya!
Don
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