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Foot-Prints In The Sand

here lies the sea and me
I am without a care
here lies freedom’s key

for a moment
my soul is stripped bare

wash away my tears
with your salty hand
wash away my fears…

but, for a moment [leave]
my foot-prints in the sand

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • DeGraw gold member
    June 29
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    Just beautiful!

    I am so impressed with your beautiful talent, considering what you said about just finding your muse so recently.
    You are extremely talented and thank you for signing my guest book in case I didn't mention it yet!
    Jennifer


  • DeGraw gold member
    June 29
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    Just beautiful!

    I am so impressed with your beautiful talent, considering what you said about just finding your muse so recently.
    You are extremely talented and thank you for signing my guest book in case I didn't mention it yet!
    Jennifer


  • atreyugurk
    May 16
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    Its very beautiful and has a feeling of absolute freedom, carefree--its great.
    -BON*BON


  • Akimbo
    May 14

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    Kj was here!

    This made me sigh. It was a really good feeling.
    Thank you.

    Here's to fleeting impressions!

    ...Great words & wisdom; it's not just smelling the coffee and feeling the sand between our toes... it's realizing that even a flicker of a glance can have a lasting effect and then, not taking it for granted.

  • bozoloper silver member
    May 5

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    i really liked your closing. i don't usually like brackets, but it seems to work very well in this piece, way to sum up emotion a few lines!


  • worshipchick
    April 30

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    I don't have anything to say that can add to this piece- I really enjoyed it. The beginning grabbed me and the end wrapped it up perfectly :-)

  • eltortedequeso
    April 30

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    such a beutiful write, I love sand and sea and you captured the essence of them! congrats on the HM!

  • temporarily-this
    April 29
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    Beautiful words, and picture too! Congrats on the HM. This is short but very sweet.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 27

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    Beautiful!! I love the soul being stripped bare and the feeling of release in this.. but also having the footprints left... wonderful write!


  • Perception
    April 26

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    Ouch... The really small font hurt my eyes... I had to like... squint to read it lol... I'm such a loser... But, it is a awesome write
    Best of luck in your contest!!

  • luna-midnight gold member
    April 26

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    ooooooohhhh i just love how you did that box thingy, lol. i dont knwo how to do those..lol.
    wonderful write though
    its soo beautiful
    good luck in the contest
    take care
    stephanie

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