Ivory moon
falls from
ebony sky -
gently stroking
ocean waters...
reflecting softly-
distorted beauty of
two lovers;
hand
in
hand
Author notes
Prompt:
Picture
Artist unknown...
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF/Quickie I by Carolina Moon.
300 points, ended April 26, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be honest here.
Comments
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nice image. would've liked it a little more personal.
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Oh this is so beautiful and I so love the form you have used! Beautiful picture too. Amazing write I so enjoyed reading. Thank for the kind comments on my poem
Theresa
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Like how the form of this particular poem is about as distracted as conscious thought can be when, well, limbs are twisted.
Also, the way you contrast ivory and ebony and then unite them, literally, at the end of the poem, is pretty interesting.
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Lovely image. A great take on the prompt. The idea of an "ivory moon" set against the backdrop of an "ebony sky" is very creative. Well done!
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AWW THIS IS SKORT BUT SWEET. QUITE SIMPLY BEAUTIFUL.
hugs xx
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You are very talented! beautiful poem. its just simply lovely
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wow, so simply yet so deep! This is an absolutely beautiful poem and paints a vivid picture. Well done, keep writing.
Malick
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Wow. Hard to believe you are fifteen.
Seems like you've been writing for years.
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beautiful and serene you captured this perfectly ~ we both thought of the moon as ivory lol best of luck
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Great write I love ebony skies beautiful.
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Excellent
Truly creative and well done. great take on the picture. Best of luck in the contest.
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Such a wonderful feel to this write. I truly enjoyed this. Thank you for your entry
Linda
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Like your ivory and ebony reflecting beauty of two lovers.
Marlene
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