Like the lightning
Your impulse saturates my senses
I end disconnected
Enclosed, lusting for your presence
Draining me from so[u]litude
Author notes
20 words about love, huh? Whoever wants to take them, you're able to, but be careful, as being loved by me isn't the best thing to happen. And yes, this sucks.
A contest entry
- Lost Love Letters by Ephiphany.
450 points, ended April 30, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I have read this poem a long time ago, and somehow, by some coincidence I came back to it. Never before have I understood anything better...
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I love those last two lines
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How do you write about love in 20 words? Its like trying to build a castle with a couple of stones I think. Having said that your authors notes show why this poem is perhaps a self fulfilling prophecy. In the end, I think this poem shows the result of love in your world.....makes me wish you lived in a better place. The first two lines really do capture the feelings of love though and it is hard for me to believe that with only 20 words a stronger statement could have been made...good luck!
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I dont think this sucks...creative yes...deep also...
like the so-u-litude
mal
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You did a good job expressing your feeling in few words. Good write
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