I saw myself in black pools
Frightened, cold and lying down
Above me aliens loomed
They had me wearing a plastic gown.
I felt uneasy not being home
And wondered how I got here
I remember falling asleep and dreaming
Of a purple talking lamp and a jeep made out of feet.
Scruffy, my stuffed animal held me tight
And then the feet ran and jumped up high
The lamp wasn’t wearing a seatbelt
So darkness filled the sky.
The higher we went, the colder it became
So I started dreaming warmer thoughts
Like summer days and lava rain
But then I awoke all covered in snot!
I thought; “This was so not cool!” (and pretty gross too)
Then I was placed in a vacuum
Where winds blew and brushes brushed
I was being groomed like the vet we take our dog to.
Machines did all the work
But when they were done
The aliens came near
They shook my hand and sniffed my hair.
I tried to explain that I was out way too late
If I overslept my mom would be upset
Because I have school the next day!
They showed me pictures of a boy with a dog
And a girl with a cat
It turns out they wanted me as a pet!
I said “No way, uh uh forget it!”
And then I saw the little alien children
With sad alien faces
And said: “Here, take Scruffy”
He’s a great friend and loves all races.
I said Goodbye and gave Scruffy a hug
And then let a new nation of beings
Show him some love.
And as the alien boys and girls
Took their turns tickling Scruffy’s ribs
I fell back asleep
Dreaming of the wonderful thing I just did.
The very next day, I woke up and took a bath
I drank some juice to quench my thirst
then stared out the window and into the heavens
Thinking of my new alien friends and Scruffy…
… spreading smiles across the universe.
A contest entry
- Alien Contest!!! by CowboyFan1.
600 points, ended May 1, 2008, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Non-monosyllabic comments welcomed
Comments
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it was unexspected that u gave them scruffy. i would have done the same thing. good poem!
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Good Title
A unique style for you my brother,
and a fine piece you've created for the contest.
I was hopping for something more depressing, so I could relate to it.
Sadly, it's the state I live in... Peace~
All the best in the contest! -Timothy
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Aww that's so cute! Good luck in the contest and great job with the form of the poem!
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Stanzas full of LoL :D
LoL! The most happy/hilarious poem I've read of yours so far.
My favorite lines:
"They had me wearing a plastic gown."
Just...LoL is all I have to say.
"Of a purple talking lamp and a jeep made out of feet."
The dream sounds authentic...nothing in dreams make sense after all. 
"So I started dreaming warmer thoughts
Like summer days and lava rain
But then I awoke all covered in snot!"
You're good writing from a child's voice.
But...
"I felt uneasy not being home"
Maybe rephrase to "I felt easy away from home"
I just prefer the way that sounds, but that's just me.
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I can't use that because it alters the meaning. Thank you for the suggestion though, and as far removed as this is from my typical writing, it's a pleasure to have you stop by and support me by commenting as you do so well.
All the best and thank you much -
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How would it alter the meaning? Please explain.
And yeah, it is very different from your other poems--it's practically freeverse! (Or rather, it IS freeverse...)
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awwwww...i loved this story...totally could be a kid's story book!!! scruffy!!! i like him...bringing smiles ALL over the universe, for sure. only a brain like yours could be so creative. awesomeness w/this!!!
*R
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A special write for a contest. Option 3 is to write about being abducted by aliens.
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