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Pendulums

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Heart clinging to expectation's feather

bounces on fleeting breeze of hope

one second bending into darkness

the other pointing towards heaven.

 

Lover's lips exhale promises

that give such moments of pure ecstasy

or leave the pulse transfused with disappointment.

 

Straining from the tempest elation

where there is no place of passion's permanent shelter,

just a tent where the soul resides

always ruffled by winds that breech serenity's covering.

 

Life beating best when speaking with finger's lace

about soul mated always with whispered enduring affections,

feeling bent towards melancholy's abyss

when all one can touch is emptiness

in one's bed

where absence is a cruel miser

of joy's donations.

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  • Rclane gold member
    April 27, 2008
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    Very well done. Drawing the reader in deeper with each line.

  • chiefmac
    April 27, 2008

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    Bring the reader in nicely with expectation's feather. Bending hope towards darkness and heaven.
    Lips exhale promises and no place for passion's shelter. Great lead for life to lace hands to touch emptiness as a cruel guard to joy. Great to see bronze trophy on such a lovely work. The flow is clear and sharp to move the reader forward. The words tingle moving over the tongue.


  • Riftkin gold member
    April 26, 2008

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    Beautifully written
    as only you can do.
    Your words I am sure
    can be felt by many here
    and without the artwork,
    this poem is its own
    form of art.

    Riftkin


  • Blooming Poet
    April 26, 2008

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    This really blew me away. you used amazing word choice and crafted that into a beautiful work of art through words. Loved it.


  • Entwining Beauty
    April 26, 2008

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    Wording is very beautiful, Such a relaxing poem to read fills my mind with such serenity excellent poem.

    good luck in the contest

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