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Silver Lily

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Silver, soft lily
Moist with early morning dew
Rests upon my breasts



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I just posted a pic because i think all lilies are beautiful

credit pic**unknown google.search.pic

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  • Candy6
    January 5
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    God this is beautiful haiku


  • Angelflower
    May 26, 2008

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    this was really lovely..
    soft and sweet.. and the imagery
    was soft and vivid.. well done
    best of luck..

    Angel


  • Pollycheck
    May 16, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my short poems contest. You have penned a very nice haiku witrh this write, but I do believe that the flower is spelled lily and not lilly.


    • Catie Sheeran gold member
      May 16, 2008
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      * sorry meant when i spelled it with 1 "L"


    • Catie Sheeran gold member
      May 16, 2008
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      Hey thanks for the nice comment...and i think somone else told me that i spelled lily wrong when i spelled it with 2 "l's" and now your saying thats wrong....lol. I really need to invest in a dictionairy thanx for the heads up...i really do appreciate it - i don't want to look stupid! lol.


  • Perception
    May 4, 2008

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    Oh... How lovely... I really love how sweet and genuine this is


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    April 27, 2008

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    Beautiful again. Wonderful work here. Again, your imagery stands out. You have talent.

    Keep writing
    Wayne Leon


  • funpum
    April 27, 2008

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    Lovely

    This is lovely Catie.

    Don't worry about syllables -575 is a misunderstanding of what haiku are about. 17 or less. Round about 12 is best. If you want to learn all about haiku, visit haikumonk on this site. His explanations are clear and correct, and his haiku are wonderful to read and learn from.

    Read, read, read. You are a good poet - it's worth the time to learn from others.


    • Catie Sheeran gold member
      April 27, 2008
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      Thank you. I have read 2 haikus from haikumonk... He is AMAZING! I'll have to look at his page tho...thanx for the reminder. I will read it and learn more.


  • individuality gold member
    April 26, 2008

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    a good poem with a nice soft alliteration starting it off smoothly, let the early morning's soft happy tears dance.

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