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Wounded Wings

 

 


A true and loving heart is always full.
Yet, sorrow always plays a proper part.
You are, and always shall be, beautiful.

Against the strength of will that's visceral,
from potions on the tip of Cupid's dart,
a true and loving heart is always full.

Your disenchantment's understandable
while waiting for the "other's" will to start.
You are, and always shall be, beautiful.

Within the flesh this lesson's volatile
and many of the tests will sting and smart.
A true and loving heart is always full.

My hand is strong, my ways irascible,

yet, with some luck I may yet touch your heart.

You are, and always shall be, beautiful.

 

We're beggars at a harvest festival

who cannot touch the foodstuffs on each cart.

A true and loving heart is always full.

You are, and always shall be, beautiful.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 




 

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  • Cannonsfire silver member
    July 16

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    I could swear this was written for every pretty woman that has ever graced AP, but then you wouldn't be that obvious would you lol C


  • NeonRose silver member
    May 6
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    A lovely Villanelle, sweet theme and great imagery.


  • Ithica silver member
    May 5

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    Now this is my favorite form!!! I just love the Villanelle, and this is the "third" contest for them running at present. This is full of beautiful sentiments and I like the repeat lines very much. But I seem to like the imagery of these lines, "Like beggars at a Harvest Festival, Who cannot touch the foodstuffs on each cart" They triggered some fond memories for me...

  • dericlee gold member
    May 5

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    A bit of last-minute coaching.




    This message goes out to all entrants:

    Finalists as shown on the contest page are preliminary choices.

    With three days left before contest closes, I’d like to take a moment to remind all entrants; a villanelle is a metered form, not just a ‘rhythmic’ form, and meter is a prime portion of the judging in this contest! Meter is not just “how many beats in a line” but a set pattern of stressed versus unstressed beats.

    While no particular meter is specified for the villanelle, it IS crucial that the meter be even. Whether iambic pentameter, anapestic trimeter, double-dactyllic meter, whatever meter, each line needs to at least loosely follow the same metric pattern as the others.

    Another strong facet if judging in this contest is demonstrating an adaptive use of the repeated lines; the best villanelles can’t be achieved by making the repeat lines sentences or independent clauses, but by using them in varied meanings as different parts of different sentences. I refer you to Dylan Thomas’ “Do not go gentle into that good night” for a fine example of how this is done. (For those unfamiliar with the work, I’ve now included it in the text of the Contest Page at http://allpoetry.com/contest/2401901 ) Please revisit the Contest Page…more information has been provided for your use in these last three days.

    If enough of you feel the need, contact me. For as few as (oh, lemme think… ) six requests, I’d be willing to stretch the contest by an additional five days so you can present your best work. In the interests of keeping what anonymity remains (glower!) please make those requests on the contest page, NOT by IM!

  • myrataal silver member
    April 30
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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 26

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    I love this so much! I'm speechless... it is just amazing!
    I'm bookmarking this...


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    April 26

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    wonderful job.
    am right on target with this one...and defiantely how i feel now. Thanks for sharing

    passions


  • Ithica silver member
    April 26
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    What a gorgeous Villanelle... I so love this form!!!


  • Amera gold member
    April 26

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    Now this is poetry and a pure delight to my ear. You have such a sad and depressed outlook on life in this poem that one feels the need to take an apple from a market cart and hand it to you.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • dericlee gold member
    April 26
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    Standard notice (going to all entries)


    Given that many "first day" poems often suffer some revision before final judging (which will take place during the final three days before close) I won't comment on this poetically yet. The contest ends May 8th...I'd like to see all editing done and your product "finished" by the fifth if possible, to aid me in judging in a timely manner.

  • cricketjeff gold member
    April 26

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    Excellent Villanelle, I may not have liked the last one but this is right back on target. Maybe it was OK leaving you to look after rhyme for a bit after all

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