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Just A Puppet

control me

     manipulate me          

          ~ I am yours ~

 

I caress your ego              

~ hanging off your every word ~

 

we both know

we like it this way

 

cut my strings

and I fall in a heap

 

~ without you ~                

     I am just a puppet…

 

with no puppeteer

     

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A contest entry

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  • OOMAZZOo
    February 15

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    NNE diserves to be controled , and well...it is even more sad to hear that you have learned to not only live with it but that you know no other way to live. sry to hear this my dear. BUT...well done with the penning


  • Pursed Poker Lips
    May 21, 2008

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    I love the creativity and set up of the poem
    Amazing! I love poems that have movement to them, it makes the reader follow every word of the piece, journeying along with it. Its a beautiful thing.
    -BON*BON


  • Akimbo
    May 14, 2008

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    :)

    I love the short, simple lines... metaphoric by itself for a puppet held up by strings. I think this is precious for its untethered sincerity alone.
    Kj


  • Lucy.
    April 29, 2008

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    Wow, great! Fantastic take on the prompt, and a well deserved silver! Congratulations. I really like this.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 27, 2008

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    Wow.. that is an excellent take on the prompt!!!

    What a metaphor too for some relationships where you are controlled... but don't leave.


  • eltortedequeso
    April 26, 2008

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    Very well written, love the message about letting people have control over other and enabling others. thanks and best of luck!!!


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    April 26, 2008

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    While not much of a fan of form poetry due to finding it distracting, I really do like this poem. ANd it is so true how we allow some people to have such control of our lives that in the end we end up nothing more than a puppet. Unfortunatly in live you ahve to choose to move people or be moved by people.


    • background music
      April 26, 2008
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      ohhhh then you won't like my other poems ! A lot of what I've been writing is like this... I am working on a metered, rhyming poem though since I havn't done one of them in a while will send you the link when I get around to posting it haha... Thanks so much for reading this, it does mean a lot to me. And thank you for understanding exactly what I wrote!

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