Here he stood groping for more then love.
There she stood beside him groping for the pain to be touched
as more then she could inflict.
They stood there at the vampire dance.
Looking for romance...
who knew?
Two creatures from the night...
From beyond the grave..
They were the rave of the dance...
Did they need another chance at love?
Who knew they would be watched and matched in the perfect
concured piece of mind?
Did he find the right one?
Was it true love... was it meant to be shove me away ... the kind of dreams we wake and afraid to recall?
Was it just that a dream?
Was it what it seemed...
They might fade into the night, or will they be dancing the vampire dance when the moon breaks the dawn?
She watched him in her mind as she closed her eyes to his ravishing hands. Her fawn- colored hair touched his torso
scratching like a cut from the vampric nails of the vicious creature he was...
She awoke but it was a dream.
It was meant for what it seemed!
He stood there at her wedding touching her as her fawn colored hair touched his torso like the scratching of the vampiric claws they had noticed... as they danced the dance together...
Alot more might be what they wanted... what they needed together... just the dance of the vampire!
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there was once a song called the Monster mash this reminded me of it
I took a look at the picture you had to write about and you have done a really great job. I love how you made it a dream just how sneaky vampires attack young ladies then have them think it was a dream. This tells a wonderful story from start to finish allowing us to see just what happened at the Vampire Dance, well done.
cyberartist MODERATOR
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This poem describes the picture I had picked pretty well and gives you even more room for the imagination, you take it further with this write.
I liked the way you described how she touched his torso and all.. I could definitely see pictures in my mind of that. Well done.
However, I think the poem had too many questions and should've had more feelings included. What the girl felt when she touched him and when he touched her was good.. you should've kept it up and gone into more depth/detail with it! (Not suggesting that it had to be erotic or anything, just saying).
Also, I think the spacing is a bit off at some parts.. Perhaps just stick to proper spacing instead?
I do like the ending though with the wedding, that was a nice unpredictable touch.
Blessed Be!
~Evolet
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