Such a small spot
at the end of a page
translucent, tissue thin...
A little diamond
that could have been
the tiny crown of “i”
rests, instead,
at the heel of “grief.”
Punctuation mark
of earth’s exhale,
yet Time’s lightest touch
turns page
and infinity’s inhale intones
“And it came to pass...”
Author notes
Photo prompt 8, Cemetary Statue
period: the point or character (.) used to mark the end of a sentence
A contest entry
- Statue Photo Inspiration by rainwalker.
450 points, ended April 29, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This brevity of layered meaning does cause
extended pause for thought. I feel the strong
sense of perfection used in choosing the words.
Without viewing the image, I come away with a
portrait of black & white that simply states
tragedies in life leaving emotion or ignorance
to turn the page.
There is also strong metaphor here and as I say
in my opening line, the layers demand attention.
Blue
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Lovely word choice and flow to the piece, you went a different way with the prompt and this is a very successful piece you have come up with. The reader can very clearly feel the sadness in this. Thank you for sharing this with us and keep on writing!
-Laura -
Ah, times of grief and other woes will surely come, for we are human, living in a fallen world. But as surely as they come, they will also pass! For hardtimes do not come to keep us wallowing in self pity or misery, but the come for us to overcome. They come to pass! What a marvelous promise--and may every jot and tittle of that hope be fulfilled.
I love the description of the period on the thin page--that was a delight to the mind's eye, and yet described something so common--totally cool. "Time's lightest touch"-- beautiful expression.
Excellent poetry, my dear!
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Wow, this is stunning. So much sadness, and so many profound levels to contemplate.
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