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Away to Learn

They followed us every single day

to catch the school bus a mile away.

Divided and straight was the asphalt road,

on either side yellow fields were sowed.

A pet, a pal, for each girl and boy

would romp and tail-wag to share our joy.

 

One by one, cars picked each of them off.

We witnessed smashed bodies. Their last cough

and soft whimpers we heard as they die

in our helpless arms. It made us cry.

The school bus parted us as if to be kind,

but life's hardest lesson was left behind.

 

Even today when I hear the squeal

of clenched brakes I cringe in dreadful chill.

 

Author notes

one year. option #4, about death. Sad parody of Mary had a Little Lamb.

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  • Good, I want to start a roadkill diner and those smashed and flattened pets will come in handy. Yum cat fricassee.

    "Whimper" that was a good touch.

    I'm glad you entered the contest, thanks.

    • WritingWretch silver member
      April 28
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      Yum! sounds like its sure to gag a maggot. Be sure and invite

      Beetlejuice. Sounds like his kind'a place.

  • Yemassee silver member
    April 27

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    I don't know if you meant it to be funny bit it is. And the ending certainly add to the feel. A dreadful thrill, poor little pets. Thanks for entering the contest.

    • WritingWretch silver member
      April 28
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      Just as I am able to write whatever I wish

      you may take it any way you wish. Thanks for your comment.

  • KayJay gold member
    April 26
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    Very good April... I like the take and it's so darkly funny... That'll teach 'em to "stay" Best of luck...

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