idle on sand-
an empty rowboat
low tide_
(my add for tanka)
beached… fractured shells in seaweed
a lone gull- sifts for dinner
My Haiku/Senyru poetry
Author notes
modern Haiku
In a list
A contest entry
- 7000 HAIKU by DogFish.
1800 points, ended May 13, 2008, 45 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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...let me repeat "Pania"'s comment
"stunning, immediate and perfect"
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very zen
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Oh... Very nice... I love the images... Very... vivid... Beautiful!
I really love what you have penned here...
Best of luck in your contest
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This creates a stark image in mind..of a single boat just sitting there perhaps waddling because of the low flow of water..beautiful..
All the best!
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stunning, immediate and perfect
tanka:
floating on a wave of sand
only the clouds are moving -
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honestly...your tanka reply is just as stunning I love what you did with it
thank you
Mal
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a two line add-on to form a tanka:
recalling their last meeting
impatient for his return
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fish sleeps with open eyes
beneath dark water shade -
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love the add on...too...
thanks
mal
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Concise image. Great pivot. Perfect.
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As Haiku is supposed to relate of the here and now,in this moment. And relate to a natural scene. This exquisite piece indeed does. Nice Haikuing!
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Full of extended images.
Marlene -
Great image you show with your words - liked this modern haiku you wrote for this contest. Wishing you well...
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Very nicely crafted haiku. You did a great job with this one. Good luck in the contest Malley!!
Kelli
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