gibbous moon rises
rippling on seawater's edge
like bright sea serpents
A contest entry
- 7000 HAIKU by DogFish.
1800 points, ended May 13, 2008, 45 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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gibbous moon! I love new words!
...I've never heard this expression!
And a great haiku, too!
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Oh... Very different. I like it! I really like how you related it to sea serpents! Nice twist...
Very beautiful! I can just imagine... *goes off to wonderland... Or somewhere like it*
mmm...
Nicely done!
and best of luck in the contest
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awwwww bwautifyk write and good luck take care
stephanie =) -
great, immediate image here, very nice.
tanka:
plovers run along the beach
as if these snakes could be food -
Liked the image in you haiku, ripples as serpents.
Marlene
to add two lines to form a tanka:
we walk on just out of reach
the light revealing our path
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This reminds me of Basho's 'bass nibbling at the moon' haiku, but it does something different with that idea. Nice!
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I like the view in this one. Very nicely written. I hope it does well in the contest. Good luck in the contest.
Kelli -
like the imagery here...catches attention..all the best!
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