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Night painter



 

Last night

like that time, long ago,

it came to me again,

the moon

to drench my pillow

and my sleepy eyes

with its silence.

I opened my palms, both hands,

like dandelions unfolding their petals,

to steal its light

to hold it tight,

and I laid it

on the palette of my dreams.

And I wished

oh, how I wished

to be a painter

to add more stars to the sky

for you.

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Prompt:I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars...Og Mandino

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  • darlintlc silver member
    June 2, 2008

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    This poem is truely worthy of gold!!

    "I opened my palm,both hands,
    like dandelions unfolding their petals,
    to steal its light,
    to hold it tight,
    and I laid it
    on the palette of my dreams"

    Beautiful...perfect story of the girl in the picture!

    Thanks for entering
    darlintlc


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 17, 2008

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    A true artist weaves a magic veil around her words....beautifully written Bravo Sonja


  • Room without doors gold member
    May 7, 2008

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    Outstanding

    I loved the ending to this poem which provides an as and poetic conclusion. The imagery is well-t it and interesting to read and the whole poem has a warmth about it that is inspiring to read. Thank you for posting.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    April 27, 2008

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    I love the softness and the scenario of the night with a tender worded poetry here..just a magical piece is here..well done...


  • jasminerose
    April 26, 2008

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    OH Sweet friend, your words are so very beautifully penned here and if only we could all be painters with this passion, love would be as brilliant as those stars that shine from within your heart!
    Just lovely!!Sigh~
    Linda

  • Namita
    April 26, 2008

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    This is bookmarked! Marvellous writing.

    "oh, how I wished
    to be a painter
    to add more stars to the sky
    for you"

    Veery very beautiful.

    - namita


  • Ladybug
    April 26, 2008

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    a wish, a dream that you could paint the stars and be there with that special one. how beautiful you paint this one. light and airy with sunshine but a tear sheds on the pillow as you write it.
    God bless you my friend. You have a great heart

    Tamara


  • Nicolette gold member
    April 26, 2008

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    "oh, how I wished
    to be a painter
    to add more stars to the sky
    for you."

    Your words show the beauty and the impact of simplicity... this is so very beautiful and i simply love this poem!!!

    ~ Nicolette


  • Puppydog gold member
    April 26, 2008

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    EVER SO SOOTHING AND LOVELY!!!!

    Ah, if we could only hold a moonbeam in our hands! 's Such soft and gentle beauty one is able to find within your words.


  • Wandika gold member
    April 26, 2008
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    Very Beautiful Sonja


  • ShelleyA
    April 26, 2008

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    A beautiful write. Heartfelt. Lovely depth of feeling. Very nice simile and nice metaphor. Good imagery, flow and tone. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Excellent closing lines. Well penned and much enjoyed. Best wishes in the contest.

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