Darkness is paradise with you
For I dwell and hide in darkness
It was my escape of life
But you made it a home for me
Your piercing stare gave me peace
It was your eyes that convinced me
To embrace who I am deep inside
It was your eyes that erased my fears
You are darkness' goddess
Your fingers slither through my skin
My eyes roll around your body
You give me shivers of lust
As you tightly held my hands
I feel as though it was already everything
Holding you meant already so much
It calms my restless heart
You made me feel alive
You rekindled the fire in my heart
You added an illusion in my reality
You are the light of my darkness
Author notes
just for the comment but if i win anything godbless to u haha, anyways, hope it suits ur taste
A contest entry
- Anything and everything!!!! by Falcon SilverWolf.
450 points, ended June 6, 2008, 74 entries
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Comments
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bravo!
probably one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read (and trust me, i have read a lot) omg, i just can't describe what i love so much about it, but its great, really, a true winner. also, the line "Your piercing stare gave me peace" is very nice. good luck! (not that you need it!)
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very unique very original. umm for criticing though i really cant say much else. yolur view on things is very much your own and this was thouroughly enjoyed by myself.
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thats beautiful
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a beautiful piece of art
A nice piece despite a few grammar errors, for example the lines:
"When she holds my hand
It seemed it was all I need",
I think it would be correct if it read:
When she holds my hand
It seems as though it is all I need
OR
When she held my hand
It seemed as if 'twas all I needed
Despite that this is a very interesting poem...I enjoyed feasting my eyes on this piece of art...Shalom
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