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Blank Stares of Blackened Lovers

Every time it happens again,
the tinkle of my broken heart,
echoes like a tinny souvenier ,
bought for a dime at a sleazy coastal gift shop.

Reminiscent of another cheap relationship,
discovered on a street corner,
cemented through an email,
nurtured like a disposable soul.

Waves crashing through my stomach,
shards of glass surrounding my black heart,
all signs of the end of the beginning,
circumspect the beginning of the end.

Liars, cheaters, whores, and players,
we populate this earth from top to bottom,
never satisfied with one drug, one fix,
on to the next lover without a touch of remorse.

Doubt far from our vocabulary,
romance infinitely dispensable,
a condom in a truckers bathroom,
your kiss of flat beer and cheap cologne.



The blackness of this world,
evidenced by the blankness of my stare,
as I fake this game of life,
and the orgasm I never had,
to hear you tell me you love me.

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  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    November 9, 2008

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    I tend to prefer rhyme to free verse. I have to say that the imagery that you have used in this poem is incredible. It is easy to see why you got a gold cup.

    Great job.

    Mike


  • everyone1 gold member
    May 18, 2008

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    You must be spent!

    Having bore your soul in this poem in such a fantastic and brave way... You courage is inspiring and your words a delight... carry on dear heart ... carry on ...

    Best wishes for you in the contest!

    ~ James ~


  • zochit2me gold member
    April 27, 2008

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    Wow! I am very impressed with this and how it spilled guts of feeling. It hit me on a personal level!
    Well done and out of the box for sure.

    Becky


  • XXCrimsonRaineXX
    April 26, 2008

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    I really loved all of the truth behind this poem. I also loved the emotion. My favorite line was
    shards of glass surrounding my black heart
    Excellent write.

    XXCrimsonRaineXX


  • pappacass
    April 26, 2008
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    wow

    you said a mouthfull here....this was a true to life write...awesome job here my friend

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