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I HaveTo Breathe Something

Fire, Collapse, Chaos, Quiet.
I have to clear my mind.
What has happened?
Breath.
What is happening?
I have to breathe.
Fire, Smoke, Panic. Quiet.

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A contest entry for:
10 Poet PIF
"I wanted to breathe smoke"

A contest entry

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  • Embossed
    April 30, 2008
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    Short, sweet, well written. I like the first/last lines and their juxtaposition.


  • total20clutz
    April 26, 2008

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    Hey

    r u okay. It's not like u to write things like this. I love though and im waiting for more but i hope its ur normal stuff not this creepy poem. Hope to hear more form u soon.