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man

i long to hear the wind through the leaves
but the buildings block the wind
i long to watch the lightning crack through the sky
but the lights of the city blur my vision
i long to feel the sun on my back
but the smog clouds the sky
i long to see the animals do as the wish
but we do as we wish

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  • XxTattered WingsxX
    April 26, 2008

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    I think this is a wondeful poem with a brilliant title. I tell what you long to have but reitterate with what keeps you from having what you desire. The imagery was pretty decent. Nice job hun.


  • Mmorpg Bella
    April 26, 2008
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    wow

    i think you need to go home, not here & not were you are now you need to go somewhere.

  • Zinzo
    April 26, 2008

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    Good

    I like this poem alot! I just think that it could be a little longer. I really like your narrative and imagry though!