three cocktails then wine
.upon empty spring stomach
.define
......a
........straight
...............line
Author notes
final line
to be read "straight_forwardly"
before the thud
Picture : sake cups
http://www.flickr.com/photos/19381823@N00/403376780/sizes/l/
Background
http://www.flickr.com/photos/cantfindme/365003055/sizes/l/
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A contest entry
- 7000 HAIKU by DogFish.
1800 points, ended May 13, 45 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Courtesy welcome and extended [Reward: double points]
Comments
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Simply done with hidden meanings lace through each word. Well done, thanks for sharing
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Jonathan ROBIN
Very Well done Great background too. Congrats on Silver
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Fedine a what...?
we will follow the same straight line
as cherry petals flutter
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lol, this is great! wonderful write, and funny too
like the way you placed the words
good luck and take care
stephanie
. Rewarded 4
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wow
I never seen a ku with an acrostin appeal to. Kudos to u in this ku contest. Kendhal22
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your back ground takes away from your talent...I believe you would be better read without the busy backdrop
the ku is strong though -
Superb
A most humorous write indeed. I think you've perfectly described what happens before someone "worships the porcelin goddess.
Here's a link to the "porcelin goddess" (LOL):
http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=porcelain+throne
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I am not used to a haiku being broken up this way. It took me a moment to understand it. It is a nicely worded haiku. Good luck.
Kelli -
lol that's a good one, I like the way it's presented
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Oooh this is good...i like
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