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Silhouete Cast

the brisk air cast a

silhouette on the ocean

dancing a presence

In a list

A contest entry

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  • misticmoonlite gold member
    June 19
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    enjoyable vision in this piece, thank you for this entry...good luck
    Linda


  • sense surreal
    October 9, 2008

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    Beautiful Haiku

    hmmm Like waves to a shore...crash in to me...surf

    It is how you describe the movements


  • DogFish silver member
    May 4, 2008
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    mystyrious...

    Mother ocean in her breast
    hinds the souls of her empire

    • kendhal22
      May 4, 2008
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      thank u

      thank u for the nice comments given to my ku. Kendhal22


  • Perception
    May 4, 2008

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    Oh... this is kind of eerie... and very soft.. and wavering... A commanding presence...
    Nice job
    THanks for sharing and
    best of luck in your contest

    • kendhal22
      May 4, 2008
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      thank u

      thank u for the wonderful comments given. Kendhal22


  • luna-midnight gold member
    May 3, 2008

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    "where hearts whisper affection
    the wind invokes sorrows' stab." my tanka i think 0.o lol

    now i really like your haiku, its awesome, nicely done and good luck
    take care
    stephanie

    • kendhal22
      May 3, 2008
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      thanks

      thanks for the tanka, and thank u for the wonderful applaudes and comment. Kendhal22


  • just mercedes gold member
    April 28, 2008

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    Nice haiku, great image.

    tanka :

    wind makes shadows dance with waves
    'til they combine and lie flat

    • kendhal22
      April 28, 2008
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      thank u

      thank u for the comment and the tanka lines. Kendhal22


  • marlene47 silver member
    April 27, 2008

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    A nice image with your haiku... brings up a lot of senses.
    Marlene

    to add two lines for a tanka:

    two figures run through the waves
    after waiting for moon rise

    • kendhal22
      April 27, 2008
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      thank u

      thank u for commenting and reading my ku. I like the last two lines thats great. Kendhal22


  • Malabu
    April 26, 2008
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    windswept waves under their heels
    two lovers become mist

    • kendhal22
      April 26, 2008
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      thank u

      This pretty good, u have away with words. Thank u for commenting on my ku. Kendhal22


  • sheltered
    April 26, 2008
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    Great job!

    like starry knights with gritty
    sands between their twinkle toes

    lol.

    • kendhal22
      April 26, 2008
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      thank u

      thank u for cute sentiment given to my poem. Kendhal22


  • Kelli Marie
    April 25, 2008

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    A very nicely written haiku. I think the font should be smaller for presentation though. Good luck in the contest.
    Kelli

    • kendhal22
      April 25, 2008
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      thank u

      thank u for commenting on my ku. I will edit my font smaller. Kendhal22

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