Our eyes remained vacant.
Staring past one another.
Under the noonday sky.
Seconds move the earth.
To that old standstill.
Of when lovers say goodbye
and confess their last farewell.
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Sad...but oh my goodness very good!!
Mylee -
A very beautiful poem. Sometimes the shortest ones say the most!
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not very long. but amazing! seriously austin, loved it!
'our eyes remained vacant. staring past one another.'--can we say goosebumps!?
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Brilliant. So much was said in a few words, and said with power. That is something very few accomplish.
Hope you have a nice day.
~Jade
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This is such a beautiful write that displays the emotions of happiness, love and yet a sadness within the end of it aswell. Although it was short it really held together the emotions and the image that I felt it was trying to create and therefore it was not too overpowering or too weak. A powerful piece, Well done.
Charlotte
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'seconds move the earth/to that old standstill'
brilliant.
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