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Not finished

kissing in fields
of daffodils
lying in grass
richly green
from morning dew.
I'd like to
make you
believe
in make believe.
I'd like to
count the stars
with you.
Tell you all,
even the truth.

Please tell me what you think

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  • just mercedes gold member
    April 26, 2008

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    Simple and sweet, beautiful imagery that speaks of love and freshness. The need to believe in make believe is poignant, counting the stars gives me an eternal image, but how hard a task you set yourself, to tell /even the truth/.