What's Wrong With our Society?
everything,as you sit with me,
gazing at the people passing by. . .
looking on how they want to die.
[I don't want to die]
Everywhere I look I see,
Girls dying to be pretty.
Starving themselves to forfill their dreams
this is insane by the way I see.
eating hardly anything,
everyone is their enemy.
Has everyone gone crazy?
they can never make me.
[do you think I'm beautiful?]
Pictures and prints in the magazines
tellin' them how they should be
which doesn't make any sense to me.
why is everyone crazy?
this is not how I will be,
not like this society.
making scars, and dieting,
just to make sure I look pretty.
[why do they always pick on me?]
Things are not as they appear,
no more happy families, I fear.
where parents act like it's world war 3
this is not how life should be.
Why can't anyone see,
can someone teach me,
why everyone is ignorant?
I don't think I can stand this.
[this is crazy]
Noone is there to care,
Noone's there to share.
your problems, to help you through this endless night,
Please reply to this plight.
Can someone open their eye's ,
as these people are walking by.
Why is everyone crazy?
but they can never break me.
[help me understand]
Making scars and cutting deep,
watching their lives through me,
why can't anyone see,
that this is our society.
[which doesn't make any sense to me]
Author notes
this is how i feel .... I got inspired by the song crazy by simple plan
A contest entry
- ~☻~ Society Sucks! So What!?! ~☻~ by Shassidy.
525 points, ended May 25, 2008, 28 entries
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an amazing piece with such truth and the way that you have argued and used the many forms of conflict gripped and inspired me because you have written with such depth and meaning that captured me. well done
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Thank you mommie!
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wow. this is fanatastic...Pagie? i think that was your nickname. anyways, fantastic job. and i totally agree. i've written a lot on the flaws in society, there are just so many of them. this is very insightful for a twelve-year-old. very well done. you are an incredibly talented poet. keep writing!
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A few tiny little errors a little rereading could easily fix. I'd like to see a bit more depth, expand on some of these ideas a little further.
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This is a great piece! I read the author's notes before reading the poem and "Crazy" by Simple Plan is one of my favorite songs. Actually, it's part of what inspired me to make the contest. In any case, I really like the ideas expressed in this, but a lot of it comes right from the song, so I think this could have been a bit more creative. Same goes for the title. Either way, this is still a really expressive piece and it has a lot of great ideas in it. My favorite parts are verse one and chorus one because those are the most original. Great job and good luck in the contest!
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this is a very good poem. i redally liked reading this.
from em....
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in verses 3 and 5 you spelled sense wrong =P
nice write
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