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To feel it all with sight (just close your eyes)




This sun drifts toward a lower key:
down with the bass notes where each night falls

deeper than yesterdays, its pale knowledge a thin line
closer to grey. To Empty. Autumn creeps closer,
like an evening of timid stars, peeking down
with eyes that closed an age before. While sad,
this helps us understand, how everything lost
in that dimming time is held as a memory of light.






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  • ardentMarch gold member
    May 8

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    again...your imagery is excellent..this is powerful, Kate...congrats on the silver....

    *applauds again*..lol
  • Yellowdogpoetry gold member
    May 8

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    Enjoyed your title immediatly. How nicely you have immersed the reader into several competing senses, touch/vision, and then encourage the reader to trust an inner sense 'just close your eyes'. I like the "interactive" attributes this encourages in me. It allows the reader to become ready for the fullness of the piece, to prepare, to breathe deep this beautiful poetry. It is lush with gentle introspection. Autumn seems to give a sense of falling away, a poignant finality. However, you curl the reader back to present by evoking a piece of wisdom, something we can know now, "While sad, this helps us understand, how everything lost in that dimming time is held as a memory of light." Such a lovely close.


  • Namita silver member
    May 8

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    This is simply beautiful. And the title- amazing. Oh wow. I soo love this one!! Thank you so much for entering.

    - namita

  • dewbee
    May 4

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    insightful

    exquisite poem, it bears several readings and like a fine wine holds it very well leaving a pleasant aftertaste of antiquity.... thoughtful and insightful poem. cheers.


  • Nicolette gold member
    April 28

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    Love this one from the title to the very last word...beautiful poetry, deep and meaningful, Kate!

    ~ Nicolette


  • ardentMarch gold member
    April 25
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    beautiful imagery & mood


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    April 25
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    love the tone in this, and the message


  • TheInnocent
    April 25
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    Don't give me a good rating on this comment

    wow i've been reading a lot of poetry lately - i really like your poem - but my brain's fried!!! sorry!!!

  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    April 25

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    That title is brilliant on its own, but this is beautiful. I love the voice in this one.

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