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Our Destiny~





Let me dry your tears;
take you under my wing
under the light of my midnight moon.

I'll be the one with loving eyes

sharing clandestine conversation
under sparkling constellations.

Spill your sorrows upon my shoulders

as I stroke your tender heart
with whispers of warmth
to soothe winds of deception that linger.

Our destiny begins here

with these fingers finding
your face, now glowing

with more than feathered intentions.





♥♥




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Author notes

pic inspired
Thank you to the hostess Night Hope for the inspiration
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also inspired by a poem by Errant Panther "Tumbleweeds"
Thank you, Cuz

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and last but not least....this is dedicated to my destiny...♥♥

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  • loneArt
    May 6

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    This seemed soft... The only way I can explain it. Great metaphore. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
    Be well Poet,
    Art


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    May 2

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    Roflmao

    good grief could ya thank anymore people and estiny rofl I had a good crackle of laughter at that part. any ways well penned poem full of strong words that really mixed well together. keep it up


  • poeticweaver gold member
    April 27

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    Beautiful...

    How I love and ador your words that whisper so softly it seems when you paint such gentle touches of love while you grace the page with beauty from your heart and soul sis. I love ya, and all the best! Peace, Brother Timothy


  • Forgotten truth
    April 27

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    Very nice poem, I love this line,

    Spill your sorrows upon my shoulders

    I love it... It really drives home what you are saying…


  • tomisb gold member
    April 26

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    There is a softness, I have come to expect of you. It so beautifully cloaks the rock you are. This heart that beats to love and once it settles into place will grow the most beautiful flowers. It is so clear in the wonder of your words and so reach in the feelings that leak out of them.
    Love,
    Tom B.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    April 26

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    Such beautiful flow and feelings of depth and love...a true work of art in word choice from the heart...you write with such emotion and it is beautiful...
    Best to you!


  • jasminerose gold member
    April 26

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    A destiny of love, two hearts coming together eternally in feather and in storm.. OH Lynda... SIGH~~~ there ya go again GF! Sigh~ I bow to you Queen!!
    Beautifully penned embracing our hearts to sigh!!
    All my best to you!!
    Jazzy


  • kaibab silver member
    April 26

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    Wow...such a transference this work of art is...a very wonderful embrace of where love flows from...and weaving story to where it returns...

  • Errant Panther gold member
    April 26

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    Oh a truly moving piece that connects neatly with the thoughts left behind from my poem "Tumbleweed". Such beautiful expression of emotion as always from you. good luck in the contest cuz.


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    April 26

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    You do this so vividly and so beautifully...*sigh...think I will read it again. Love, C


  • Night Hope gold member
    April 25
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    "Spill your sorrows upon my shoulders

    as I stroke your tender heart
    with whispers of warmth
    to soothe winds of deception that linger."

    Personally, I rather enjoy a decent Aztec religious ceremony. *ahem* This is lovely, as I knew it would be, Lynda. Yes, deceptions linger...ahhh, but Truths...they are infinite, eternal, tracing our souls with their fingers. Thank you for entering, my Friend. Good luck, Sweetie. Wanda


    • poet2angels silver member
      April 25

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      lmao You crack me up girlie..... Aztec ceremony lol....hmmmmm I guess some take metaphor much too literally....TY for the vote of confidence after that harsh review LMAO

      Your contests always do inspire and seem to stir up some **** too lmao

      Lynda

      • Night Hope gold member
        April 25

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        "stir up some **** too"??? Ahhh...my job here is done, then. And all before I even arrived upon the scene.

        • poet2angels silver member
          April 25
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          yeah, LOL If it's not directed at sweet lil' you, then it is directed at your friends LOL Oh well

  • PageTurner silver member
    April 25

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    Sweet Destiny...


    A whispery wave of calm came over this reader. Sounds to me like you were describing the hostess or yourself.




    Wonderful Words, Poet!

    ~ Nicky♥


  • sunshinegirl
    April 25

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    SIGH!!!!!!

    Oh my dear friend,

    I sooooo love reading your wonderful words, and this is one reason why! This is truly beautiful!! I could almost hear it being whispered in my ear as I was reading it!!

    Great Job!

    Best of luck in this contest!!


    and love

    Nyetta


  • hiraeth
    April 25

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    It's not my kind of poetry, but it's definitely a good idea, and you have the makings of something good. Some of the words seem oddly placed and don't feel like they fit -- clandestine conversation / under sparkling constellations; and the whole "stroke your tender heart," which I read as literally stroking someone's beating heart as if it'd been ripped out at an Aztec religious ceremony.

    Then again, these are probably just personal gripes. Decent job nonetheless.

    -Cristina
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